She sounds like Edna St. Vincent Millay, also an inveterate sonneteer with an eye for men.
Would you say Tolmie is influenced by rap? I'm thinking in traditional sonnets, rhymes are often further than one line apart. Here you say Tolmie is prepared to rhyme the ends of lines as long as they're together, but then kicks things up a notch by piling them closer even than the ends of consecutive lines.
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Date: 2016-08-16 11:21 am (UTC)Would you say Tolmie is influenced by rap? I'm thinking in traditional sonnets, rhymes are often further than one line apart. Here you say Tolmie is prepared to rhyme the ends of lines as long as they're together, but then kicks things up a notch by piling them closer even than the ends of consecutive lines.